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What's wrong with this sentence - niggles of language that drive me mad

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I keep seeing a lot of this kind of thing, sometimes in books and often in magazines:

Mathematician John Couch Adams, who was born in Laneast near Launceston is best known for predicting the existence of the planet Neptune.

I already know the answer to my own question, but could someone else tell me how the above should be changed? I don't want to give away any clues ...
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I agree with the above.

Embarrassingly, I think I've made the same mistake a few times but it really should be caught with a good proofread.
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Neptune is not a planet. that's where it went wrong.

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Neptune is not a planet. that's where it went wrong.


No!!! They may take Pluto, but they will never take Neptune (from the list of planets).

And whatever you do, keep your hands off Uranus...
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I can only see the missing comma in front of the word is.

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Neptune is not a planet. that's where it went wrong.


Say it isn't so ole' Spritey one. Did they take another one away from us? I think it is a Trump Conspiracy. I still want Pluto back ...... Talk about getting sent back to the minor league ....


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Neptune is not a planet. that's where it went wrong.


You're right. He's the god of the sea. Goes by Poseidon on his off days.
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Love the Oxford comma smile

Personally, I would take this:

Mathematician John Couch Adams, who was born in Laneast near Launceston is best known for predicting the existence of the planet Neptune

The subject is already established, that's superfluous.

And do this:

Mathematician John Couch Adams, born in Laneast near Launceston, is best known for predicting the existence of the planet Neptune