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This is better than your last poem, which was good, there are more poetic elements in this one. Your poem has a nice melody. I think you have a lot of raw talent and I am not just saying that because I like you, which is true. You should post this one to Love Poems too.
thanks everyone...It's not really a love poem (well maybe to the sea) which is why I posted this here
I like this.
And that's coming from a fellow poet.
It's very flowing, and I attempt to write about the sea all the time, as it's my backyard, but I can't catch it.
You did. And wonderfully.
Rei♥
knowing i am in bed with my love in my arms (u know who u are) and staying in bed all day with my love and not going to cricket,school or work but making sweet love all day with her. while its cold so we will be under the covers all day long
thanks the sea is important to me...I'm glad you liked it